John, I did not know you were such a film buff!! We definitely share that passion. I started reading your script and although I only had time for a few pages, I am looking forward to reading the whole thing. What I have read so far seems very descriptive and intense. You seem to have a good grasp on how to write dialogue that not only sets up the story's conflict, but gives the reader an insight into who these characters are.  I would suggest getting some script writing software to clean up some of the formatting but other than that it looks greats. It is also great you have this up on ePortfolio. I would definitely suggest putting more of your work up here if you have any. This is a competitive, fast paced business and if you ever get the opportunity to show your work to a producer or a director, it is important you can provide them with easy access to that work. ePortfolio can be a great place to consolidate and showcase your obvious talents. So, if you don't have any more scripts, I encourage you to write more!!, If you want to brainstorm ideas, I am always looking to collaborate. Best of luck.

-Adam Yogel